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Peer editing a non-chronological report about pandas

I can edit my own and my peer's non-chronological report about pandas.

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Peer editing a non-chronological report about pandas

I can edit my own and my peer's non-chronological report about pandas.

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Lesson details

Key learning points

  1. Editing is a critical part of the writing process.
  2. Writing is most successful when editing is used to rethink, rephrase and reconsider first ideas.
  3. Editing can be done by oneself, with a peer or with a teacher.
  4. Editing is most successful when it is chunked by punctuation, sentence structure, cohesion and vocabulary.
  5. A growth mindset helps us benefit most from editing.

Common misconception

Pupils may have difficulty in making edits to their work in a practical way - where to write extra words etc.

Writing double-spaced is a good way of allowing room for editing - or you may want to have pupils re-draft the report completely, depending on your own school approach.

Keywords

  • Editing - the process of revising and refining a piece of writing, focusing on improving its punctuation, sentence structures and language

  • Punctuation - a set of standardised symbols and marks used in written language to structure sentences

  • Text cohesion - refers to how a text flows to maintain the interest of the reader and achieve text purpose

  • Vocabulary - the language choices made by the writer

This lesson focuses on editing just one section of the pupils' reports - you may wish to provide time after this lesson for them to edit the whole report, or you may wish for them to complete each 'check' for the whole report during each task.
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6 Questions

Q1.
Which passage is punctuated correctly?
Pandas are well-known animals they have distinctive colouring.
Correct answer: Pandas are well-known animals. They have distinctive colouring.
Pandas are well-known animals, they have distinctive colouring.
Q2.
Which sentence is punctuated correctly?
Pandas from the family Ursidae are native to China.
Correct answer: Pandas (from the family Ursidae) are native to China.
Pandas (from the family Ursidae are native to China).
Q3.
Which sentence has an appropriate tone for a non-chronological report?
Pandas eat a crazy amount of bamboo!
You'll never believe how much bamboo pandas eat.
Correct answer: Pandas consume bamboo in vast quantities.
Q4.
Which phrases are appropriate to use in a non-chronological report to describe bamboo?
crunchy, delicious stems
Correct answer: thick, woody stems
Correct answer: a fast-growing plant
a plant that shoots up like a weed
Q5.
Which passage is correctly punctuated?
Correct answer: Pandas have a white fur. As a result, they can camouflage in snow.
Pandas have a white fur. As a result they can camouflage in snow.
Pandas have a white fur. As, a result, they can camouflage in snow.
Q6.
Which passages use cohesive devices correctly?
Correct answer: Because pandas struggle to digest bamboo, they must eat a huge amount.
Pandas struggle to digest bamboo because they must eat a huge amount.
Correct answer: Pandas struggle to digest bamboo. As a result, they must eat a huge amount.
Pandas must eat a huge amount of bamboo. They struggle to digest it.

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6 Questions

Q1.
What punctuation needs to be added to this sentence? 'As a consequence of this pandas are now very rare.'
brackets
Correct answer: a comma
two commas
a full stop
Q2.
Which fronted adverbial could join these two sentences? Pandas eat lots of bamboo. They struggle to digest it.
As a result,
Due to this,
Correct answer: Despite this,
Because of this,
Q3.
What punctuation could be added to this sentence? The giant panda a much-loved mammal is native to China.
Correct answer: a pair of brackets
Correct answer: a pair of commas
a full stop
a single comma
Q4.
What co-ordinating conjunction could be added to join these two sentences? Pandas now live in mountainous areas. They once lived in lowlands as well.
and
or
Correct answer: but
Q5.
Which passage has poor text cohesion?
Correct answer: Habitats have been destroyed. Pandas are very rare.
Habitats have been destroyed. As a result, pandas are very rare.
Because habitats have been destroyed, pandas are very rare.
Q6.
Which sentence uses vocabulary most appropriately for a non-chronological report?
Pandas are in real trouble now.
Correct answer: Pandas are threatened by several different problems.
You've got to feel sorry for pandas these days.