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Peer editing a non-chronological report about a penguin

I can edit my own and my peer's non-chronological report about macaroni penguins.

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Peer editing a non-chronological report about a penguin

I can edit my own and my peer's non-chronological report about macaroni penguins.

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Lesson details

Key learning points

  1. Editing is a critical part of the writing process.
  2. Writing is most successful when editing is used to rethink, rephrase and reconsider first ideas.
  3. Editing can be done by oneself, with a peer or with a teacher.
  4. Editing is most successful when it is chunked by punctuation, sentence structure, vocabulary and cohesive devices.
  5. A growth mindset helps us benefit most from editing.

Common misconception

Pupils may have difficulty in making edits to their work in a practical way - where to write extra words etc.

Writing double-spaced is a good way of allowing room for editing - or you may want to have pupils re-draft the report completely, depending on your own school approach.

Keywords

  • Editing - the process of revising and refining a piece of writing, focusing on improving its punctuation, sentence structures and language

  • Punctuation - a set of standardised symbols and marks used in written language to structure sentences

  • Text cohesion - refers to how a text flows to maintain the interest of the reader and achieve text purpose

  • Vocabulary - the language choices made by the writer

This lesson focuses on editing just one section of the pupils' reports - you may wish to provide time after this lesson for them to edit the whole report, or you may wish for them to complete each 'check' for the whole report during each task.
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6 Questions

Q1.
Which of the following gives the definition for a subheading?
the closing paragraph of a non-fiction text
the first sentence of a paragraph that tells us what it is about
language structures that create text cohesion
Correct answer: the word, phrase or sentence that introduces a paragraph
Q2.
Which is the best definition of 'editing'?
checking your spelling and vocabulary
re-reading your work
Correct answer: checking and improving vocabulary, spelling, text cohesion and punctuation
rewriting your work
Q3.
Which passage is punctuated correctly?
Penguins sometimes swallow stones scientists are not sure why.
Correct answer: Penguins sometimes swallow stones. Scientists are not sure why.
Penguins sometimes swallow stones, scientists are not sure why.
Q4.
Which sentence is punctuated correctly?
Correct answer: The penguins, which are excellent swimmers, spend months at sea.
The penguins which are excellent swimmers, spend months at sea.
The penguins, which are excellent swimmers spend months at sea.
Q5.
Which sentence has an appropriate tone for a non-chronological report?
Did you know - macaroni penguins can talk!
Correct answer: Macaroni penguins are sociable creatures and they can communicate using noises.
Macaroni penguins love a natter - they're always making different noises.
Q6.
Which phrases are appropriate to use in a non-chronological report about macaroni penguins?
a messy little nest
Correct answer: a shallow, rock-lined nest
frosty, bone-chilling seas
Correct answer: freezing oceans

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6 Questions

Q1.
What punctuation needs to be added to this sentence? 'Because of this krill numbers are falling.'
brackets
Correct answer: a comma
two commas
a full stop
Q2.
Which fronted adverbial could join these two sentences? Macaroni penguins gather in vast colonies. They must use noises to locate each other.
However,
Correct answer: As a consequence of this,
In addition,
Furthermore,
Q3.
What punctuation could be added to this sentence? The macaroni penguin a member of the Eudyptes family is native to the Southern Ocean.
Correct answer: a pair of brackets
Correct answer: a pair of commas
a full stop
a single comma
Q4.
What co-ordinating conjunction could be added to join these two sentences? The penguins need to build a good fat store. They will not be able to survive while incubating their eggs.
but
and
Correct answer: or
because
Q5.
Which passage has poor text cohesion?
Correct answer: Macaroni penguins have a blubber layer. They can stay warm at sea.
Because macaroni penguins have a blubber layer, they can stay warm at sea.
Macaroni penguins have a blubber layer. Due to this, they can stay warm at sea.
Q6.
Which sentence uses vocabulary most appropriately for a non-chronological report?
Goodness me, what a pickle these penguins are in!
You've got to feel sorry for these poor penguins.
Correct answer: These penguins are being affected by a number of threats.