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Writing the first half of the duel scene

I can write the first half of the duel scene, using a range of cohesive devices and all the elements of a narrative.

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Year 6

Writing the first half of the duel scene

I can write the first half of the duel scene, using a range of cohesive devices and all the elements of a narrative.

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Lesson details

Key learning points

  1. We have planned the structure, content and vocabulary for our narrative.
  2. When we write, we use cohesive devices to connect our plan notes together into coherent sentences.
  3. We can use fronted adverbials of time to add pace to our writing.
  4. We should aim to include all the narrative elements of action, description, dialogue and emotions in our writing.
  5. Oral rehearsal prior to writing helps us to write more easily.

Keywords

  • Narrative elements - the content of a narrative, often including action, description, dialogue and emotions

  • Cohesive devices - language features that contribute to text cohesion

  • Fronted adverbial of time - a sentence starter that tells the reader when something happens

  • Dialogue - a conversation between two or more people, written in a text or story

Common misconception

Pupils may struggle to use all the cohesive devices listed in the lesson.

All these cohesive devices are covered in our Year 5 Grammar curriculum; some children may benefit from additional input using selected slides from that content.

Spend plenty of time on the oral rehearsal for each paragraph, modelling how different ideas can be connected in different ways. This will make the writing process much more straightforward. A slide has also been left lined for you to complete shared writing with your class.
Teacher tip

Content guidance

  • Depiction or discussion of serious crime
  • Depiction or discussion of violence or suffering

Supervision

Adult supervision required

Licence

This content is © Oak National Academy Limited (2024), licensed on Open Government Licence version 3.0 except where otherwise stated. See Oak's terms & conditions (Collection 2).

Lesson video

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6 Questions

Q1.
Which of the following are elements of a narrative?
Correct answer: action
Correct answer: description
persuasive techniques
Correct answer: emotion
Correct answer: dialogue
Q2.
What is the first event in our plan?
Romeo reacting to Mercutio's death
Correct answer: Mercutio and Tybalt duelling
Romeo and Tybalt duelling to the death
Mercutio in pain and dying
Q3.
Who might have said the following piece of dialogue? "Watch out Romeo, Tybalt's coming back over."
Romeo
Mercutio
Correct answer: Benvolio
Tybalt
Q4.
Which elements of a narrative are shown here? 'Romeo felt his blood begin to boil and he clenched his fists.'
Correct answer: action
description
dialogue
Correct answer: emotion
Q5.
Which pair of words could complete the following sentence? '__________ to the side of the street, he collapsed on the ground, __________ in agony.'
staggered, writhed
staggered, writhed
Correct answer: staggering, writhing
staggering, scurrying
Q6.
What is Romeo thinking as Mercutio and Tybalt fight?
He wants Tybalt to win.
He wants Mercutio to kill Tybalt.
Correct answer: He wants them to stop fighting.
He wants to avenge Mercutio's death.

6 Questions

Q1.
Which of these features have been used in our text?
first person
present tense
Correct answer: third person
Correct answer: past tense
Q2.
Which narrative element is shown here? 'Mercutio’s crimson blood stained his snow-white clothes.'
action
Correct answer: description
dialogue
emotion
Q3.
Which cohesive device is shown here? 'Mercutio raised his shimmering rapier, watching it glint in the midday sun.'
adverbial complex sentence
relative complex sentence
Correct answer: non-finite (-ing) complex sentence
compound sentence
fronted adverbial of time
Q4.
Which of these example sentences combine the following ideas correctly using cohesive devices? 'Tybalt swaggered towards Romeo. He sneered with disgust.'
Correct answer: Tybalt swaggered towards Romeo and he sneered with disgust.
Correct answer: Tybalt swaggered towards Romeo, sneering with disgust.
Correct answer: Tybalt swaggered towards Romeo as he sneered with disgust.
Tybalt swaggered towards Romeo, sneered with disgust.
Q5.
Which two cohesive devices are used in the following example? 'Soon, both men were drenched in sweat and they were panting in the heat of Verona’s midday sun.'
adverbial complex sentence
relative complex sentence
non-finite (-ing) complex sentence
Correct answer: compound sentence
Correct answer: fronted adverbial of time
Q6.
Which of these pieces of dialogue are punctuated correctly with inverted commas?
Correct answer: “Ay, ay. A scratch, a scratch!” Mercutio replied.
Correct answer: Mercutio replied, “Ay, ay. A scratch, a scratch!”
Mercutio replied “Ay, ay. A scratch, a scratch!”
“Ay, ay. A scratch, a scratch” Mercutio replied.