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Year 6

Writing the second half of the duel scene

I can write the second half of the duel scene, using a range of cohesive devices and all the elements of a narrative.

New
New
Year 6

Writing the second half of the duel scene

I can write the second half of the duel scene, using a range of cohesive devices and all the elements of a narrative.

Lesson details

Key learning points

  1. We have planned the structure, content and vocabulary for our narrative.
  2. When we write, we use cohesive devices to connect these plan notes together into coherent sentences.
  3. We should aim to include all the narrative elements of action, description, dialogue and emotions in our writing.
  4. Oral rehearsal prior to writing helps us to write more easily.
  5. We can use adverbs to add detail to describe how verbs have been done.

Common misconception

Pupils may find it difficult to punctuate direct speech correctly.

Complete lessons on punctuating direct speech can be found in our Year 5 Grammar curriculum; you may wish to briefly review a couple of these slides based on your assessment of pupils' work in the previous lesson.

Keywords

  • Narrative elements - the content of a narrative, often including action, description, dialogue and emotions

  • Adverb - a word that describes or gives more information about a verb, often showing the manner in which it happens

  • Cohesive devices - language features that contribute to text cohesion

A slide has been left lined for you to complete shared writing with your class. You may feel that you want to use shared writing again in the second part of the lesson, depending on the needs of your group.
Teacher tip

Content guidance

  • Depiction or discussion of serious crime
  • Depiction or discussion of violence or suffering

Supervision

Adult supervision required

Licence

This content is © Oak National Academy Limited (2024), licensed on Open Government Licence version 3.0 except where otherwise stated. See Oak's terms & conditions (Collection 2).

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6 Questions

Q1.
Which person and tense does our narrative retelling of the duel scene in 'Romeo and Juliet' use?
first person, present tense
first person, past tense
Correct answer: third person, past tense
third person, present tense
Q2.
Which narrative element is shown here? 'At that moment, Tybalt lunged forward and he landed a heavy blow on Mercutio’s chest.'
Correct answer: action
description
dialogue
emotion
Q3.
Which narrative elements are shown here? '“Are you hurt?” cried Benvolio, rushing towards his friend.'
Correct answer: action
description
Correct answer: dialogue
Correct answer: emotion
Q4.
Which cohesive devices are shown here? 'Suddenly, he rushed towards Mercutio and he pushed his dazzling rapier aside.'
adverbial complex sentence
relative complex sentence
Correct answer: compound sentence
Correct answer: fronted adverbial
Q5.
Which cohesive device is shown here? 'Letting out a soft groan, the wounded man fell to the ground.'
adverbial complex sentence
compound sentence
Correct answer: non-finite (-ing) complex sentence
relative complex sentence
Q6.
Which pieces of dialogue are punctuated correctly with inverted commas?
“A plague on both your houses” he rasped.
He rasped “A plague on both your houses!”
Correct answer: “A plague on both your houses!” he rasped.
He rasped “a plague on both your houses!”
Correct answer: He rasped, “A plague on both your houses!”

6 Questions

Q1.
Which adjectives best describe the atmosphere we have aimed for in our narrative?
slow
Correct answer: fast
relaxed
Correct answer: tense
Q2.
Which narrative elements are used in the following example? 'Dropping his rapier, Mercutio grimaced in pain.'
Correct answer: action
description
Correct answer: emotion
dialogue
Q3.
Which adverb could complete the following sentence? 'Mercutio swaggered __________ towards Tybalt.'
anxiously
Correct answer: arrogantly
reluctantly
uncontrollably
Q4.
Which adverb could complete the following sentence? '“Romeo, get up! Here’s Tybalt approaching!” Benvolio gasped __________.'
happily
reluctantly
Correct answer: worriedly
confidently
Q5.
Which of these options could complete the following sentence? 'Romeo wept bitter tears __________.'
that was why he felt sad.
Correct answer: that spilled onto Mercutio's lifeless corpse.
Correct answer: that he let fall onto Mercutio's open wound.
that was the problem.
Q6.
What cohesive devices have been used here? 'Plunging his rapier violently into the young man’s chest, Romeo cut a jagged wound that oozed crimson blood. Immediately, Tybalt fell down heavily.'
Correct answer: non-finite (-ing) complex sentence
relative complex sentence
adverbial complex sentence
Correct answer: fronted adverbial of time