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Editing the final two paragraphs of a narrative based on 'Jabberwocky'

I can make purposeful edits to the climax and resolution of a narrative based on 'Jabberwocky'.

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Editing the final two paragraphs of a narrative based on 'Jabberwocky'

I can make purposeful edits to the climax and resolution of a narrative based on 'Jabberwocky'.

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Key learning points

  1. Editing is the process of making changes to improve our writing.
  2. Editing can be done by oneself, with a peer or with a teacher.
  3. When editing punctuation, missing or incorrectly used capital letters, full stops, inverted commas & commas are checked.
  4. When editing sentence structure, the way sentences are constructed is checked to improve and enhance text flow.
  5. When editing language, choices of words and phrases are carefully reviewed.

Common misconception

Pupils may think that editing means correcting spelling and handwriting only.

Editing involves improving punctuation, language choices, sentence structure and enhancing the overall quality and effectiveness of the writing.

Keywords

  • Editing - the process of improving writing to improve text flow and overall quality

  • Punctuation - a set of standardised symbols and marks used in written language to structure sentences

  • Sentence structure - the way words are arranged within a sentence to convey meaning

  • Vocabulary - the use of specific words and phrases to convey a meaning

Provide pupils with word banks so that they can upgrade and improve their language choices. Ensure that you give a clear amount of time for each editing chunk and allow pupils opportunities to practise editing on mini-whiteboards.
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6 Questions

Q1.
Put the sections of a narrative in chronological order.
1 - opening
2 - build-up
3 - climax
4 - resolution
Q2.
Which sentence is correctly punctuated?
enraged, the monster bolted like a bull towards the knight.
Correct answer: Enraged, the monster bolted like a bull towards the knight.
Enraged, the monster bolted like a bull towards the knight
enraged, the monster bolted like a bull towards the knight
Q3.
Which direct speech sentence is correctly punctuated?
Don’t take one more step, or I’ll slice off your head,’’ warned the boy.
“Don’t take one more step, or I’ll slice off your head warned the boy.
Correct answer: “Don’t take one more step, or I’ll slice off your head,’’ warned the boy.
“don’t take one more step, or I’ll slice off your head’’ warned the boy.
Q4.
'With a deep breath,' is an example of which of these?
a subordinating conjunction
Correct answer: a fronted adverbial of manner
an expanded noun phrase
a main clause
Q5.
Match each word class to its definition.
Correct Answer:adjective,a word that describes a noun

a word that describes a noun

Correct Answer:adverb,a word that describes a verb

a word that describes a verb

Correct Answer:noun,a naming word for a person, place or thing

a naming word for a person, place or thing

Correct Answer:verb,a doing, being or having word

a doing, being or having word

Q6.
Which sentence is correctly punctuated?
Correct answer: As he picked up the monstrous head, a wave of pride washed over the boy.
As, he picked up the monstrous head, a wave of pride washed over the boy.
As he picked up the monstrous head a wave of pride washed over the boy.
As he picked up the monstrous head a wave of pride, washed over the boy.

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6 Questions

Q1.
What is editing?
rewriting a whole piece of text
Correct answer: making improvements in language choices
Correct answer: making improvements to sentence structure
only correcting mistakes
Q2.
Match the key terms to their definitions.
Correct Answer:sentence structure,the way words are arranged and organised within sentences

the way words are arranged and organised within sentences

Correct Answer:vocabulary,language choices made by a writer

language choices made by a writer

Correct Answer:punctuation,a set of symbols and marks used to structure sentences

a set of symbols and marks used to structure sentences

Q3.
Which conjunction best joins the following two clauses together? 'The ecstatic man dropped to his knees __________ he held his arms wide.'
but
or
although
Correct answer: and
if
Q4.
Which of these should we do when editing sentence structure?
Check that language choices are ambitious to engage the reader.
Check for missing commas.
Correct answer: Check that we've used a range of different sentence types to make the text flow.
Correct answer: Read sentences aloud to check that they make sense.
Q5.
What should we do when making improvements to language choices?
Correct answer: Check that language choices are ambitious.
Check for missing capital letters.
Check for missing full stops.
Correct answer: Check the language matches the text type.
Q6.
Which sentence would you most likely find in a piece of descriptive narrative writing?
Correct answer: A calm quiet echoed through the trees as a bird gently whistled.
It was quiet.
A bird flew above.
I saw a bird in the forest.