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Planning the second paragraph of a diary entry based on 'The Journey'

I can write a plan for the second paragraph of a diary entry.

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Planning the second paragraph of a diary entry based on 'The Journey'

I can write a plan for the second paragraph of a diary entry.

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Lesson details

Key learning points

  1. When rehearsing and planning to write a diary entry, we do so in the first person from the character's perspective.
  2. An effective plan for a diary entry contains important thoughts and feelings.
  3. A plan is written in note format using bullet points to capture the most important information.
  4. This paragraph will explain what the girl misses about home.
  5. This paragraph will also explain what the girl hopes for in the future.

Common misconception

Pupils may find it difficult to identify which key information should be included in the notes.

Re-read the final pages from the text to discuss how she is feeling at the end of the story. Model making notes and identifying which thoughts and feelings are the most important.

Keywords

  • Notes - written out of full sentences

  • First person perspective - the point of view where the speaker or writer is the 'I' character providing a personal account of events or experiences

  • Plan - a framework that writers create before they write a section or whole text

Ensure that you have additional resources like word banks for pupils to refer to that reference 'I', 'me', 'my', 'we', 'our' and 'us' words to ensure they are writing in the first person.
Teacher tip

Equipment

You will need a copy of the 2016 Flying Eye Books edition of ‘The Journey’ by Francesa Sanna for this lesson.

Content guidance

  • Depiction or discussion of sensitive content
  • Depiction or discussion of violence or suffering

Supervision

Adult supervision recommended

Licence

This content is © Oak National Academy Limited (2024), licensed on Open Government Licence version 3.0 except where otherwise stated. See Oak's terms & conditions (Collection 2).

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6 Questions

Q1.
What are included in diary entries?
Correct answer: a recount of experiences
Correct answer: thoughts and feelings
facts about the world
speech sentences
Q2.
Which of the following are key linguistic features of a diary entry?
Correct answer: first person
Correct answer: past and present tense
third person
rhyming words
subheadings
Q3.
Order the following to show the layout of a diary entry.
1 - date
2 - greeting - 'Dear Diary,'
3 - paragraphs to organise recount
4 - sign-off
Q4.
Which of the following is a complete sentence?
I my friends and toys.
i am missing my friends and toys.
Correct answer: I am missing my friends and toys.
I am missing my friends and toys
Q5.
Match the linguistic feature to the correct definition.
Correct Answer: progressive past tense,were walking

were walking

Correct Answer: progressive present tense,am feeling

am feeling

Correct Answer:first person,I miss my friends.

I miss my friends.

Correct Answer:show-not-tell language,My jaw dropped.

My jaw dropped.

Q6.
This diary entry should be written in an informal tone.
True
False

Exit quiz

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6 Questions

Q1.
Why is it important to write this diary entry from the first person perspective?
because the writer is the main character in the story
Correct answer: because her diary is where she writes about her life from her own point of view
because she is going on a journey
Q2.
Order the following to show how they will appear in a diary entry.
1 - date
2 - greeting (e.g. Dear Diary,)
3 - recount of journey
4 - explanation of current feelings and hopes for the future
5 - sign-off
Q3.
How should notes for a diary entry be organised?
Correct answer: in bullet points
in order of importance
in alphabetical order
in full sentences
Correct answer: in notes
Q4.
Which of the following thoughts tells the reader the girl is missing home?
'The boat journey was terrifying.'
'We were turned away at the border and had to run as fast as we could.'
Correct answer: 'I miss my dolls and toys!'
'I hope we will find somewhere safe to play outside.'
Q5.
Which of the following thoughts tells the reader what the girl hopes for the future?
'We are now safely on a train.'
Correct answer: 'I hope we will find somewhere safe to play outside.'
'The waters were so rough.'
'I was completely exhausted.'
Q6.
Which of the following is a complete sentence?
The safe place outside.
want a place to play outside safely.
Correct answer: I want a place to play outside safely.
I want a place to play outside safely