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Editing a narrative based on 'The Man on the Moon'

I can make purposeful edits to my narrative opening of ‘The Man on the Moon’.

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Editing a narrative based on 'The Man on the Moon'

I can make purposeful edits to my narrative opening of ‘The Man on the Moon’.

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Lesson details

Key learning points

  1. Editing is the process of making changes to improve our writing.
  2. When editing punctuation, missing or incorrectly used capital letters, full stops and commas are all checked.
  3. When editing sentence structure, the way sentences are constructed is checked to improve and enhance text flow.
  4. When editing language, choices of words and phrases are carefully reviewed.

Common misconception

Pupils may think that editing means correcting spelling and handwriting.

Editing involves improving language choices, sentence structure and enhancing the overall quality and effectiveness of the writing.

Keywords

  • Editing - the process of improving writing to improve text flow and overall quality

  • Punctuation - a set of standardised symbols and marks used in written language to structure sentences

  • Sentence structure - the way words are arranged within a sentence to convey meaning

  • Vocabulary - the use of specific words and phrases to convey a meaning

Provide pupils with word banks so that they can upgrade and improve their language choices. Allow them opportunities to practise editing on mini-whiteboards. Pupils could also use this lesson to edit the rest of their narrative.
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6 Questions

Q1.
Which sentence is correctly punctuated?
the young girl looked through her telescope
the young girl looked through her telescope.
The young girl looked through her telescope
Correct answer: The young girl looked through her telescope.
Q2.
'The excited, determined girl' is an example of which of these?
a fronted adverbial
a subordinate clause
Correct answer: an expanded noun phrase
an adjective
Q3.
Match the word class to its example.
Correct Answer:verb,glimpsed

glimpsed

Correct Answer:adverb,slowly

slowly

Correct Answer:adjective,barren

barren

Correct Answer:noun,staircase

staircase

Q4.
Which sentence is correctly punctuated?
As the girl looked through her telescope her eyes widened in surprise.
Correct answer: As the girl looked through her telescope, her eyes widened in surprise.
As, the girl looked through her telescope her eyes widened in surprise.
As the girl looked through her telescope her eyes widened, in surprise.
Q5.
A sentence is formed of two main clauses joined with a co-ordinating conjunction.
Correct Answer: compound, Compound
Q6.
What must a clause contain?
an adverb
an adjective
Correct answer: a verb
a full stop

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6 Questions

Q1.
What is editing?
rewriting a whole piece of text
Correct answer: making improvements in language choices
Correct answer: making improvements to sentence structure
only correcting mistakes
Q2.
Match the word to its definition.
Correct Answer:sentence structure,the way words are arranged and organised within sentences

the way words are arranged and organised within sentences

Correct Answer:vocabulary,language choices made by a writer

language choices made by a writer

Correct Answer:punctuation,a set of symbols and marks used to structure sentences

a set of symbols and marks used to structure sentences

Q3.
Which sentence is accurately punctuated with capital letters?
excitedly, Lily raced to get home.
Correct answer: Excitedly, Lily raced to get home.
excitedly, lily raced to get Home.
Excitedly, lily raced to get home.
Q4.
Which conjunction should join these two clauses together? 'Lily was determined to send her letter to the moon, __________ nothing was working.'
when
Correct answer: but
or
if
Q5.
What should we do when editing sentence structure?
Check that language choices are ambitious to engage the reader.
Check for missing commas.
Correct answer: Use a mix of sentence types to ensure our writing flows for the reader.
Q6.
What should we do when making improvements to language choices?
Correct answer: Check language choices are ambitious.
Check for missing full stops.
Check for missing capital letters.
Correct answer: Check the language matches the text type.