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Editing the first recount paragraph of a journalistic report about the Titanic

I can edit the recount paragraph of a journalistic report.

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Editing the first recount paragraph of a journalistic report about the Titanic

I can edit the recount paragraph of a journalistic report.

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Lesson details

Key learning points

  1. The purpose of an editing lesson is to improve writing and make necessary corrections.
  2. Vocabulary, grammar and punctuation can be changed to make writing outcomes more effective in meeting text purpose.
  3. When editing, we are selective about which parts of our writing to improve.
  4. Editing does not involve re-writing the entire piece.

Common misconception

Pupils may think that editing requires them to rewrite the entire piece of writing.

Make explicit references to how to be selective with which elements of the writing to edit, for example vocabulary or sentence structure.

Keywords

  • Editing - the process of improving writing to improve text flow and overall quality

  • Grammar - the set of rules that govern a language

  • Punctuation - a set of standardised symbols and marks used in written language to structure sentences

  • Sentence structure - the way words are arranged and organised within sentences to convey meaning

  • Vocabulary - the language choices made by the writer

Having pupils peer-edit each other's writing may lead to a more thorough editing process.
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6 Questions

Q1.
Match the terms to their definitions.
Correct Answer:verb,a doing, being or having word

a doing, being or having word

Correct Answer:main clause,a clause that makes sense on its own

a clause that makes sense on its own

Correct Answer:relative subordinate clause,a clause beginning with a relative pronoun

a clause beginning with a relative pronoun

Correct Answer:adverbial subordinate clause,a clause beginning with a subordinating conjunction

a clause beginning with a subordinating conjunction

Correct Answer:clause,a group of words that contains a verb

a group of words that contains a verb

Q2.
Which of these is a simple sentence?
The ship, which set sail at midday, is sailing towards Cherbourg, France.
Correct answer: Titanic was built by White Star Line at the Harland & Wolff Shipyard in Belfast.
As passengers boarded the vessel, crowds gathered at the quayside.
Crew collected passengers' luggage and they loaded it onto the ship.
Q3.
Which of these is a compound sentence?
The ship, which set sail at midday, is sailing towards Cherbourg, France.
Titanic was built by White Star Line at the Harland & Wolff Shipyard in Belfast.
As passengers boarded the vessel, crowds gathered at the quayside.
Correct answer: Crew collected passengers' luggage and they loaded it onto the ship.
Q4.
Which of these is a relative complex sentence?
Correct answer: The ship, which set sail at midday, is sailing towards Cherbourg, France.
Titanic was built by White Star Line at the Harland & Wolff Shipyard in Belfast.
As passengers boarded the vessel, crowds gathered at the quayside.
Crew collected passengers' luggage and they loaded it onto the ship.
Q5.
Which of these is an adverbial complex sentence?
The ship, which set sail at midday, is sailing towards Cherbourg, France.
Titanic was built by White Star Line at the Harland & Wolff Shipyard in Belfast.
Correct answer: As passengers boarded the vessel, crowds gathered at the quayside.
Crew collected passengers' luggage and they loaded it onto the ship.
Q6.
Match the terms to their examples.
Correct Answer:co-ordinating conjunction,but

but

Correct Answer:subordinating conjunction,because

because

Correct Answer:relative pronoun,who

who

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6 Questions

Q1.
Match the key words to their definitions.
Correct Answer:editing,the process of improving writing to improve text flow

the process of improving writing to improve text flow

Correct Answer:grammar,the set of rules that govern a language

the set of rules that govern a language

Correct Answer:punctuation,standardised symbols and marks used in written language

standardised symbols and marks used in written language

Correct Answer:sentence structure,how words are arranged and organised to convey meaning

how words are arranged and organised to convey meaning

Correct Answer:vocabulary,the language choices made by the writer

the language choices made by the writer

Q2.
Which of these is a function of a comma?
Correct answer: to separate nouns in a list
Correct answer: after a fronted adverbial
to mark the end of a sentence
Correct answer: after a subordinate clause that comes first in a complex sentence
Correct answer: around an embedded relative clause
Q3.
Which of these are types of language choice that you would use in a journalistic report?
Correct answer: fronted adverbials
capital letters
Correct answer: subject-specific vocabulary
Correct answer: passive voice
Q4.
Which of these linguistic devices can be used to create a formal tone?
Correct answer: formal fronted adverbials
contracted words
Correct answer: journalistic language
Correct answer: subject-specific vocabulary
Q5.
Which of these are part of the editing process?
Correct answer: selecting which parts of the writing to improve
rewriting the whole piece
only correcting mistakes
Correct answer: making edits to punctuation, grammar and sentence structure
Q6.
Select the correct word to complete this sentence: As passengers __________ boarding the Titanic, crowds gathered at the quayside.
Correct answer: were
where
wear