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Editing paragraphs of a narrative in 'Whale Rider'

I can edit the opening and build-up of a narrative in 'Whale Rider'.

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Editing paragraphs of a narrative in 'Whale Rider'

I can edit the opening and build-up of a narrative in 'Whale Rider'.

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Key learning points

  1. Editing is the process of making changes to improve our writing.
  2. To edit punctuation, missing or incorrectly used capital letters, full stops, inverted commas and commas are checked.
  3. When editing language, choices of words and phrases are carefully reviewed.
  4. Knowledge of synonyms is helpful to ensure vocabulary choices match their intended effect on the reader.
  5. When editing sentence structure, the way sentences are constructed is checked to improve and enhance text flow.

Keywords

  • Editing - the process of improving writing to improve text flow and overall quality

  • Vocabulary - the use of specific words and phrases to convey a meaning

  • Punctuation - a set of standardised symbols and marks used in written language to structure sentences

  • Sentence structure - the way words are arranged within a sentence to convey meaning

Common misconception

Editing writing only involves correcting grammatical errors and spelling mistakes.

Effective editing goes much deeper. Ensuring the overall structure is logical and the content flows smoothly is crucial. This involves checking the organisation of ideas, the coherence of paragraphs and the transitions between them.

Pupils may need access to a thesaurus and might want to re-draft their paragraphs completely.
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6 Questions

Q1.
Put the sections of a narrative in chronological order.
1 - opening
2 - build-up
3 - climax
4 - resolution
Q2.
Which sentence is correctly punctuated?
Correct answer: Joyfully, Paikea rolled down the hill.
joyfully, Paikea rolled down the hill
Joyfully, Paikea rolled down the hill
joyfully, Paikea rolled down the hill.
Q3.
Which direct speech sentence is correctly punctuated?
You're a girl! Go to the back!'' Koro demanded.
Correct answer: ''You're a girl! Go to the back!'' Koro demanded.
''You're a girl! Go to the back Koro demanded.
''you're a girl! Go to the back!'' Koro demanded.
Q4.
'With the wind in her hair,' is an example of which of these?
a subordinating conjunction
an expanded noun phrase
Correct answer: a fronted adverbial of manner
a main clause
Q5.
Match each word class to its definition.
Correct Answer:adjective,a word that describes a noun

a word that describes a noun

Correct Answer:adverb,a word that describes a verb

a word that describes a verb

Correct Answer:noun,a naming word for a person, place or thing

a naming word for a person, place or thing

Correct Answer:verb,a doing, being or having word

a doing, being or having word

Q6.
Which sentence is correctly punctuated?
As, he looked out at the breathtaking landscape, Paikea stared up lovingly.
As, he looked out, at the breathtaking landscape Paikea stared up lovingly.
As he looked out at the breathtaking landscape Paikea stared up lovingly.
Correct answer: As he looked out at the breathtaking landscape, Paikea stared up lovingly.

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6 Questions

Q1.
What is editing?
rewriting a whole piece of text
Correct answer: making improvements in language choices
Correct answer: making improvements to sentence structure
only correcting mistakes
Q2.
Match the key terms to their definitions.
Correct Answer:sentence structure,the way words are arranged and organised within sentences

the way words are arranged and organised within sentences

Correct Answer:vocabulary,language choices made by a writer

language choices made by a writer

Correct Answer:punctuation,a set of symbols and marks used to structure sentences

a set of symbols and marks used to structure sentences

Q3.
Which conjunction best joins the following two clauses together? 'Thoughtfully, she caressed the smooth exterior of his shell necklace __________ she felt the calling of her ancestors.
but
or
although
Correct answer: and
if
Q4.
Which of these should we do when editing sentence structure?
Check that language choices are ambitious to engage the reader.
Check for missing commas.
Correct answer: Check that we've used a range of different sentence types to make the text flow.
Correct answer: Read sentences aloud to check that they make sense.
Q5.
What should we do when making improvements to language choices?
Correct answer: Check that language choices are ambitious.
Check for missing capital letters.
Check for missing full stops.
Correct answer: Check the language matches the text type.
Q6.
Which sentence would you most likely find in a piece of descriptive narrative writing?
The sun was shining.
I saw a bird flying in the mountains.
Correct answer: One bright, glorious day, a young girl rode towards the sparkling sea.
It was a warm day.