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Writing paragraph two of an emotive narrative scene in 'Whale Rider'

I can write paragraph two of an emotive narrative scene for the climax of ‘Whale Rider’.

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Year 4

Writing paragraph two of an emotive narrative scene in 'Whale Rider'

I can write paragraph two of an emotive narrative scene for the climax of ‘Whale Rider’.

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Lesson details

Key learning points

  1. The emotive scene is written over two paragraphs and it is important to demonstrate a change in atmosphere.
  2. Using a range of sentence types (simple, compound and complex) improves text flow and cohesion.
  3. Precise and ambitious vocabulary, including 'show-not-tell' language, is used to convey an emotive atmosphere.
  4. Direct speech and characters' internal thoughts are used to convey their emotions.
  5. Oral rehearsal before writing helps to structure grammatically correct sentences and check for sense.

Keywords

  • Emotive - evoking intense feelings or emotions

  • 'show-not-tell' - shows a character’s feelings by describing their actions, body language and facial expressions

  • Direct speech - the term used for a character speaking out loud in a text

  • Internal thoughts - personal feelings and opinions typically not spoken aloud

Common misconception

Internal thoughts are always written from the first person perspective of the character.

In this piece, pupils will not switch between the third person and the first person perspective. Ensure pupils use their plan with ideas for Paikea's internal thoughts and model how to write these in the third person.

Revise the rules for punctuating direct speech prior to pupils writing paragraph two. Ensure a model of direct speech is available for pupils to refer to.
Teacher tip

Equipment

You must have access to the film 'Whale Rider' (South Pacific Pictures, 2002) to complete this unit. Images of the characters and scenes from the film will be helpful.

Licence

This content is © Oak National Academy Limited (2024), licensed on Open Government Licence version 3.0 except where otherwise stated. See Oak's terms & conditions (Collection 2).

Lesson video

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6 Questions

Q1.
How do you use a plan to write part of a narrative?
copy it out word for word
Correct answer: use the notes to form a range of full sentences
Correct answer: follow the chronology
Q2.
Which of the following is a fronted adverbial of time?
Gently,
However,
Correct answer: After a few hours,
On the shore,
Q3.
Which piece of punctuation follows a fronted adverbial?
a full stop
an exclamation mark
Correct answer: a comma
inverted commas
Q4.
Order the four key moments of the climax chronologically.
1 - After some time, the whales start to die.
2 - The villagers give up and they start walking away from the whales.
3 - Paikea communicates with the lead whale.
4 - Paikea leads the whales back into the sea.
Q5.
What is the emotive atmosphere of the climax?
excitement
Correct answer: hopelessness
anger
calmness
Q6.
Which sentence contains direct speech?
Koro waved his granddaughter away.
Koro shouted at his granddaughter.
Correct answer: “This is not your fight!” shouted Koro despairingly.
She was Paikea, the Whale Rider, she thought to herself.

6 Questions

Q1.
Match the sentence type to its example.
Correct Answer:simple,All their efforts had been for nothing.

All their efforts had been for nothing.

Correct Answer:compound,Paikea waded into the water and she reached out with a trembling hand.

Paikea waded into the water and she reached out with a trembling hand.

Correct Answer:complex,Koro stared helplessly as he hurried forward.

Koro stared helplessly as he hurried forward.

Q2.
What does an adverbial complex sentence consist of?
one main clause
two main clauses and a subordinating conjunction
Correct answer: a main clause, an adverbial clause and a subordinating conjunction
Q3.
What is the name of the punctuation mark that indicates where the words the character said begin and end?
comma
Correct answer: inverted commas
question mark
exclamation mark
full stop
Q4.
Which direct speech sentence is correctly punctuated?
Koro desperately shouted, “there’s nothing else we can do!”
Correct answer: Koro desperately shouted, “There’s nothing else we can do!”
Koro desperately shouted “There’s nothing else we can do”
Koro desperately shouted, There’s nothing else we can do!
Q5.
Which sentence includes an example of an internal thought?
She reached out with a trembling hand.
“This is not your fight!” shouted Koro despairingly.
All their efforts had been for nothing.
Correct answer: She was Paikea, the Whale Rider, she thought to herself.
Q6.
Which of the following are subordinating conjunctions?
or
Correct answer: when
and
Correct answer: after
Correct answer: as