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Drafting a piece of descriptive writing on 'Alice's Adventures in Wonderland'

I can draft a piece of descriptive writing and then go back over it and revise it.

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Drafting a piece of descriptive writing on 'Alice's Adventures in Wonderland'

I can draft a piece of descriptive writing and then go back over it and revise it.

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Lesson details

Key learning points

  1. Drafting is where you write the first version of a piece of writing.
  2. Revising is where you look at or consider again a piece of writing in order to correct or improve it.
  3. Using a variety of sentence starters is important because it can influence the pace, emphasis or cohesion of a sentence.
  4. You can vary your sentence starters by using adjectives, verbs or adverbs.

Common misconception

That a piece of writing is completely finished once you have written it.

The first time you complete a piece of writing is it in its draft form. You want to go back and continually revise it.

Keywords

  • Draft - The first version of a piece of writing.

  • Mood - The emotional response that a writer wants to give the reader.

  • Revise - Where you look at or consider a piece of writing again to correct or improve it.

  • Visualise - To form a picture of someone or something in your mind.

  • Evoke - To bring or recall (a feeling, memory, or image) to the conscious mind.

You can ask the students to draft and revise their remaining paragraphs as homework or in the next lesson.
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6 Questions

Q1.
What is an adjective?
a being, doing or having word
Correct answer: a word that describes a noun
the person, place or thing that is doin the action
Q2.
What is a verb?
a word that modifies another word
Correct answer: a being, doing or having word
the person, place or thing that is doing the action
Q3.
Which of the following is an adjective?
confusingly
Correct answer: anxious
running
Q4.
The emotional response that a writer wants to give the reader is called the of a text.
personification
Correct answer: mood
melody
modifier
Q5.
Writing that is designed to be written in a detail and interesting way so that the reader can visualise the scene is called writing.
academic
persuasive
Correct answer: descriptive
Q6.
Starting with the least effective, place these descriptive sentences in order of effectiveness.
1 - The trees had green leaves, brown trunks, and brown branches.
2 - The trees had luscious, verdant leaves and brown trunks.
3 - The trees had luscious, verdant leaves that rustled in the wind.

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6 Questions

Q1.
What is a draft?
a set of steps to complete a piece of writing
Correct answer: the first version of a piece of writing
when you go through your work and correct any mistakes
Q2.
What does revising mean?
writing down the first version of a piece of writing
Correct answer: looking back over a piece of work and making improvements
creating a plan to complete a piece of writing
Q3.
What does editing mean?
Correct answer: the process of making technical corrections
the process of reframing ideas
the process of writing down your ideas for the first time
Q4.
It's important to vary your sentence starters because they can influence the emphasis, cohesion, and of a sentence.
Correct answer: pace
pitch
accuracy
Q5.
Starting with the first, place the steps to approaching a description of an image in order.
1 - Create a mind-map that highlights the details
2 - Choose the details you want to focus on
3 - Zoom in on the details and make notes
4 - Decide on the mood
5 - Use lingustic devices and vocabulary choices to influence the mood
Q6.
What does visualise mean?
Correct answer: To form a picture of someone or something in your mind.
To bring or recall (a feeling, memory, or image) to the conscious mind.
To be able to hear the sounds from the scene in your mind.