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Year 10
AQA
Refining descriptions with semantic fields, present participles, and semicolons
I can edit and revise the content of a descriptive piece to improve it.
New
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Year 10
AQA
Refining descriptions with semantic fields, present participles, and semicolons
I can edit and revise the content of a descriptive piece to improve it.
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Lesson details
Key learning points
- Proofreading is an active process that enables us to spot and correct errors in written work.
- Changing your verbs and nouns to ones that work together can create a semantic field or overall atmosphere.
- You can link two closely related sentences with a semi-colon.
- Add a sentence that starts with a present participle to transport the reader into a scene.
Keywords
Semantic field - A group of words related in some way.
Atmosphere - The mood or feeling of a piece of writing.
Semicolon - A piece of punctuation (;) that can separate two closely related clauses.
Present participle - A form of a verb that ends in -ing that can show continuous action.
Proofreading - Carefully checking for errors in a text before it is published or finished.
Common misconception
Proofreading entails reading through a piece of writing once to check for errors.
There are a variety of different strategies for proofreading (LC3). Encourage students to use the strategies that work best for them.
The focus of this lesson is on editing and refining - you may wish to revisit an earlier piece of writing students have completed and use this throughout this lesson.
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Starter quiz
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6 Questions
Q1.
Which word is missing from this definition of narrative voice: 'The a story is told from.'
Q2.
Who wrote 'Twenty Thousand Leagues Under the Sea'?
Q3.
Which of the below are examples of structural features in a text?
metaphor
alliteration
Q4.
What is the name of the submarine in 'Twenty Thousand Leagues Under the Sea'?
'The Arronax'
'The Nemo'
Q5.
What is being described here: 'Carefully checking for errors in a text before it is published or finished.'
improving
editing
changing
Q6.
Which of the below is the best definition of a semantic field?
a group of words different in some way
a group of words that sound similar
a group of words that are synonymous with each other
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6 Questions
Q1.
What is being described here: 'The mood or feeling of a piece of writing'?
Q2.
Which of the below is the correct definition of the purpose of a semicolon?
to show a pause or something unsaid
to introduce a list
to convey intense emotion
Q3.
Which word in the following sentence could be changed and why? 'As laughter echoed through the air and jubilant music filled the streets, the cheerful sun overhead frowned on the festive celebration.'
echoed - it could be swapped for a more positive synonym.
jubilant - a more subdued adjective would be appropriate.
laughter - this action doesn't suit what is being described.
Q4.
Andeep is describing a tense scene in which a character is trying not to be detected. What nouns and verbs would be appropriate for this scene?
bright
evil
Q5.
Which of the below would be a useful thing to do when proofreading a text?
totally re-write my concluding paragraph
add an additional paragraph describing my character in detail
Q6.
Which of the below are examples of present participles?
quickly
rapidly
fast