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Year 10
Edexcel

Refining descriptions with semantic fields, present participles, and semicolons

I can edit and revise the content of a descriptive piece to improve it.

New
New
Year 10
Edexcel

Refining descriptions with semantic fields, present participles, and semicolons

I can edit and revise the content of a descriptive piece to improve it.

Lesson details

Key learning points

  1. Proofreading is an active process that enables us to spot and correct errors in written work.
  2. Changing your verbs and nouns to ones that work together can create a semantic field or overall atmosphere.
  3. You can link two closely related sentences with a semi-colon.
  4. Add a sentence that starts with a present participle to transport the reader into a scene.

Common misconception

Proofreading entails reading through a piece of writing once to check for errors.

There are a variety of different strategies for proofreading (LC3). Encourage students to use the strategies that work best for them.

Keywords

  • Semantic field - A group of words related in some way.

  • Atmosphere - The mood or feeling of a piece of writing.

  • Semicolon - A piece of punctuation (;) that can separate two closely related clauses.

  • Present participle - A form of a verb that ends in -ing that can show continuous action.

  • Proofreading - Carefully checking for errors in a text before it is published or finished.

The focus of this lesson is on editing and refining - you may wish to revisit an earlier piece of writing students have completed and use this throughout this lesson.
Teacher tip

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6 Questions

Q1.
Which word is missing from this definition of narrative voice: 'The a story is told from.'
Correct Answer: perspective, perspective, perspective., 'perspective'
Q2.
Who wrote 'Twenty Thousand Leagues Under the Sea'?
Correct Answer: Jules Verne, Verne, verne, jules verne
Q3.
Which of the below are examples of structural features in a text?
Correct answer: shifts in time
Correct answer: contrast
Correct answer: pace
metaphor
alliteration
Q4.
What is the name of the submarine in 'Twenty Thousand Leagues Under the Sea'?
Correct answer: 'The Nautilus'
'The Arronax'
'The Nemo'
Q5.
What is being described here: 'Carefully checking for errors in a text before it is published or finished.'
Correct answer: proofreading
improving
editing
changing
Q6.
Which of the below is the best definition of a semantic field?
Correct answer: a group of words related in some way
a group of words different in some way
a group of words that sound similar
a group of words that are synonymous with each other

6 Questions

Q1.
What is being described here: 'The mood or feeling of a piece of writing'?
Correct Answer: atmosphere, Atmosphere, atmosphere., 'atmosphere'
Q2.
Which of the below is the correct definition of the purpose of a semicolon?
Correct answer: to separate two closely related clauses in a sentence
to show a pause or something unsaid
to introduce a list
to convey intense emotion
Q3.
Which word in the following sentence could be changed and why? 'As laughter echoed through the air and jubilant music filled the streets, the cheerful sun overhead frowned on the festive celebration.'
Correct answer: frowned - it doesn't match the sentence's positive atmosphere.
echoed - it could be swapped for a more positive synonym.
jubilant - a more subdued adjective would be appropriate.
laughter - this action doesn't suit what is being described.
Q4.
Andeep is describing a tense scene in which a character is trying not to be detected. What nouns and verbs would be appropriate for this scene?
Correct answer: lurked
bright
Correct answer: shadows
Correct answer: evaded
evil
Q5.
Which of the below would be a useful thing to do when proofreading a text?
Correct answer: correct spelling, punctuation and grammatical errors
Correct answer: check you have used commas correctly to separate clauses
Correct answer: change the start of sentences if they are repetitive
totally re-write my concluding paragraph
add an additional paragraph describing my character in detail
Q6.
Which of the below are examples of present participles?
Correct answer: running
Correct answer: sprinting
quickly
rapidly
fast