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Writing excellent model answers on Edexcel conflict poetry

I can create a written response which meets a success criteria.

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Writing excellent model answers on Edexcel conflict poetry

I can create a written response which meets a success criteria.

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Key learning points

  1. Topic sentences must be comparative when comparing texts.
  2. Comparisons should be made between ideas, intentions, themes and messages.
  3. Correlative and comparative conjunctions are a good way to signpost your comparative writing.
  4. Within paragraphs, evidence can move back and forth between the two poems and be linked with connectives.
  5. Drawing a direct comparison of quotations should take place at least once across the essay.

Keywords

  • Discourse marker - a word or phrase used to link ideas and signpost the direction of the writing

  • Comparative - measured or judged by estimating the similarity or difference between one thing and another

  • Inference - a conclusion reached on the basis of evidence and reasoning

  • Topic sentence - explains the focus or main idea of an analytical paragraph

Common misconception

You should analyse one poem and then analyse the second, making your comparisons at this point.

The best analysis writing weaves comparisons throughout. A great way to practise this is by beginning each paragraph with a topic sentence that uses correlative conjunctions (e.g. both ... and ...).

Prior to the lesson, you could set the question completed by Laura in the first learning cycle as a homework task, meaning that students will have their response to the question that they could compare to Laura's model answer.
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Equipment

You will need access to a copy of the Edexcel GCSE Conflict Poetry Anthology.

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Content guidance

  • Depiction or discussion of discriminatory behaviour
  • Depiction or discussion of violence or suffering
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Supervision

Adult supervision recommended

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Licence

This content is © Oak National Academy Limited (2025), licensed on
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6 Questions

Q1.
What is the poem 'Belfast Confetti' about?
exploring the differences between working class people and middle class people
challenging derogatory and racist language
Correct answer: the chaos and instability of the Troubles in Ireland
the destruction caused by the Vietnam War
Q2.
Textual detail in a written response is ...
Correct answer: the evidence you use to support your answer.
the detail you put into an answer.
how detailed the writer has been in their text.
Q3.
Which example uses correlative conjunctions?
Whereas Zephaniah explores racial tension.
Agard explored the impact of casual racism.
Correct answer: Both Zephaniah and Agard explore racial tension and the impact of casual racism.
Q4.
Starting with the first, put the elements of a single paragraph outline in to chronological order.
1 - topic sentence
2 - supporting detail
3 - concluding sentence
Q5.
A conclusion reached on the basis of evidence and reasoning is known as an .
Correct Answer: inference
Q6.
Which of these are examples of comparative discourse markers?
Correct answer: likewise
furthermore
thus
Correct answer: contrastingly

6 Questions

Q1.
Match the key terms to their definitions.
Correct Answer:discourse marker,a word or phrase whose job is to organise writing
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a word or phrase whose job is to organise writing

Correct Answer:comparative ,showing similarities or differences
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showing similarities or differences

Correct Answer:inference ,a conclusion reached on the basis of evidence and reasoning
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a conclusion reached on the basis of evidence and reasoning

Correct Answer:topic sentence,explains the focus or main idea of a paragraph
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explains the focus or main idea of a paragraph

Q2.
When writing a comparative response you should...
Correct answer: weave ideas about both poems into paragraphs.
always include one poem only in each paragraph.
begin comparing a key quote.
Q3.
When comparing two texts...
Correct answer: evidence can move back and forth between the two poems.
Correct answer: ideas should be linked with connectives.
there should only be 1 quotation per paragraph.
you should refer to context in every paragraph.
Q4.
Which of these options is a correct pair of correlative conjunctions?
Correct answer: neither/nor
neither/and
both/nor
Correct answer: both/and
Q5.
must be comparative when comparing texts.
context
Correct answer: topic sentences
discourse markers
Q6.
When comparing poems your comparisons should focus on ...
methods.
quotations.
Correct answer: key ideas.

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