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Model responses for a ‘Leave Taking’ essay about identity and belonging

I can use model responses about identity and belonging in Winsome Pinnock’s ‘Leave Taking’ to refine my own writing about the play.

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Model responses for a ‘Leave Taking’ essay about identity and belonging

I can use model responses about identity and belonging in Winsome Pinnock’s ‘Leave Taking’ to refine my own writing about the play.

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Lesson details

Key learning points

  1. Topic sentences state a paragraph's main idea.
  2. Select main quotations and supporting quotations to include in an essay.
  3. Main quotations should be analysed; supporting quotations don't need to be analysed.

Common misconception

You don't need to plan topic sentences in full.

Write topic sentences in full when planning. They give the essay structure and make sure you develop and support your thesis.

Keywords

  • Thesis - The overarching argument to an essay, supported by the entire text.

  • Topic sentence - The first sentence of a paragraph. It states the paragraph’s main idea.

  • Dramatic methods - The tools a playwright uses to create drama. Examples are setting, stage directions, dialogue and language choices.

  • Main quotations - Quotations which support your topic sentence, and that require analysis.

  • Supporting quotations - Quotations which support your topic sentence, but don’t require analysis.

Consider if you want students to use Izzy's topic sentences (from learning cycle 1) in the practice task of learning cycle 2.
Teacher tip

Equipment

You need access to a copy of Winsome Pinnock's 'Leave Taking' published by Nick Hern Books.

Content guidance

  • Contains strong language
  • Depiction or discussion of discriminatory behaviour
  • Depiction or discussion of sensitive content

Supervision

Adult supervision recommended

Licence

This content is © Oak National Academy Limited (2024), licensed on Open Government Licence version 3.0 except where otherwise stated. See Oak's terms & conditions (Collection 2).

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6 Questions

Q1.
In Scene Two of 'Leave Taking', Del accuses Enid of being blind to racial discrimination. She says, "You see the police vans hunting us down".
Correct Answer: don't, dont, Dont, Don't, don't.
Q2.
An essay on 'Leave Taking' will start with a thesis statement. What is a thesis statement?
A topic sentence.
A summary of the text you are writing about.
Correct answer: Your overarching argument for the essay, supported by the entire text.
A repetition of the essay question.
A statement about the dramatic devices Pinnock uses.
Q3.
Winsome Pinnock wrote 'Leave Taking'. Pinnock's parents moved from Jamaica to England, which is where Pinnock was born and grew up. This makes Pinnock a generation migrant.
Correct Answer: second, Second, Second., second., "second"
Q4.
When writing a 'Leave Taking' essay, you will include topic sentences. What is true of topic sentences?
They are synonyms for thesis statements.
Correct answer: They explain the focus of an individual paragraph.
They should include main quotations.
They should repeat your thesis.
They should list the dramatic devices you will explore.
Q5.
In her introduction to 'Leave Taking', Pinnock describes Enid as "caught two worlds."
Correct Answer: between, "between", Between, Between., between.
Q6.
In Scene Six of 'Leave Taking', Mai says to Del, "You at peace with yourself, you at home ."
Correct Answer: anywhere, Anywhere, "anywhere", Anywhere., anywhere.

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6 Questions

Q1.
When planning an essay on 'Leave Taking', you will create topic sentences. What is true of topic sentences?
Correct answer: You should write them in full sentences.
You should write them in note form.
They should include one to two quotations.
They should include analysis of dramatic methods.
Correct answer: They should develop ideas you have set out in your thesis.
Q2.
A explains the focus of an individual paragraph.
Correct Answer: topic sentence, Topic Sentence, Topic sentence, Topic sentence., topic sentence.
Q3.
Pinnock is a playwright. When analysing her play 'Leave Taking', you will explore her dramatic methods. Which of the following are not dramatic methods?
setting
props
Correct answer: Pinnock
stage directions
Correct answer: analysis
Q4.
When collecting quotations to write an essay on 'Leave Taking', how should you divide them?
into stage directions and dialogue
into quotations with dramatic methods and those without dramatic methods
into quotations you will use in your topic sentence, and those you won't
into interesting quotations and simple quotations
Correct answer: into main quotations and supporting quotations
Q5.
Before writing an essay on 'Leave Taking', you should create a plan. What is part of the planning process?
Correct answer: writing topic sentences
Correct answer: annotating the essay question
writing a main body paragraph
Correct answer: writing a thesis statement
Correct answer: selecting your main quotations and your supporting quotations for each paragraph
Q6.
Match the essay terms to their definitions.
Correct Answer:thesis,overarching argument supported by whole text

overarching argument supported by whole text

Correct Answer:topic sentence,first sentence of a paragraph, stating its main idea

first sentence of a paragraph, stating its main idea

Correct Answer:dramatic methods,the tools a playwright uses to create drama, e.g. dialogue

the tools a playwright uses to create drama, e.g. dialogue

Correct Answer:main quotations,quotations you will analyse for their dramatic methods

quotations you will analyse for their dramatic methods

Correct Answer:supporting quotations,quotations you will embed into analytical sentences

quotations you will embed into analytical sentences